11.26 Ariadne Shoes
 Deep in who’s snowy winter who’s Earth lapped a mizzle  That fell for days     Froze thick    That broke away  made sport crests   of old growth   He...Read More
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yes, I can see where it would exhaust. It doesn't compromise! Â So take its advice:do more nothing
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yes, I'm sure it takes a toll on a reader too, especially -I hope mostly- in NaNo. I actually am really enjoying it--but it is hard work, dredging. I don't normally work for like six hours straight on...
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Ooh, a good start. I don't think I dare attempt a glosa. What's the epigraph? (i.e., the poem you took the 4 lines from)
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Tears    are exhausted   now shed blood Deep deep   the baleful  courtyards  who knows how deep Folds  on  fol...Read More
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I'm going to have to study this glosa business. Right now just robbing Peter to pay Paul. Will have to post crap later tonight. May it console us all.
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Yes, Alison, I found that challenge very involving -- spent much longer than I usually would and also rhymed other than the required lines. But it was great fun, and I can see you profited from it. I...
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I didn't attempt this challenge - it seemed too hard! Maybe I will try it yet What an amazing thing you have done here. (Change who's to whose though - I think)
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no no Cyn, it's not whose, it's who. who, like Osal's If you think grammatically, you might want to say whose, but try to see it my way If you read the last line of S2 you will see who is she. I know...
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I could be wrong, but I still think that the possessive of who is whose. And I want to read this as possessive Who's is "who is" - like who's there - I am pretty sure. But I could be wrong.
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nope. not here. who is a name, in this poem. I'll try to straighten it out tomorrow. With the rest of the poem. who's IS normally who is, of course you're right. But not here. It's a bit of a...
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Ah Who is a name! Could you capitalize? Might make intent clear.
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oh, you know what. I thought I had done that with the first instance! It got lost, as I keep working on it. But I want it small because she feels so small. Maybe I'll do the first one in italics.
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Very rich result. I love the use of "deep" in each first line and the colors of the second. I also thought you might have meant "whose." I will have to check out glosa, too!
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Funny. I got who's (as a name) right away. Perhaps because I knew I was in Alison's world (and that she knows the difference).
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well I love Alison's world, but I still can't resolve this who in my mind. No matter, the rest of it for me is just lovely.
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